Wednesday, April 3, 2013

Dory and Marlin - Just Keep Swimming

Today Miss King gave us a writing challenge. We had to write about Finding Nemo. The challenge is to add action and detail to the speech. Which is when Dory singing Just Keep swimming. Hope you like my story...
Down in the deep blue sea at the edge of a sea cliff, depressed Marlin lay on a rock. He was worried about his son Nemo who had been caught by divers. Swimming up to him, Dory questioned Marlin happily, “Hey Mr Grumpy Gills When life gets you down, you know what you gotta do?” Marlin sadly mumble "I don’t want to know what you gotta do.” “Just keep swimming, just keep swimming, just keep swimming, swimming, swimming What do we do? We swim swim,” Dory sang cheerfully, while pulling Marlin by the fin down the sea cliff. Marlin whispered, “Dory, No singing.” Dory just ignored him and just kept singing “I love to swim. When you want to swim.” Suddenly, “See I'm gonna get stuck now with that song now it’s in my head!” Marlin yelled in anger! Dory stopped singing immediately. “Sorry.” she replied.

1 comment:

  1. Hello Jouan,
    I enjoyed reading your story. I liked how you used punctuation in correct places because it makes it more understandable.
    Keep up the great work Jouan.


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